Hi Sage,
I'm reading your book now and I have some comments.
-- A couple times you say, "I'm mono." I know what you mean but your readers likely won't understand this slang. I would suggest you show this work to some people who know NOTHING about polyamory and ask them to list any slang or terminology that they don't understand. Then be careful to define these terms or use language that is generally understood.
-- I would add a link to the polyamory.com forums on your links page.
-- You may wish to list some books that you like on page 24. For example, I might pick, "Sex at Dawn", "Polyamory in the 21st Century" and "Five Love Languages". Some people are book worms and a few good polybooks would be very helpful to them if they are hurting or bewildered.
-- I was very impressed with your writing. It is strong, clear and to the point. Good work!
Warm regards, Rick.