Your profile gives a much more inviting vibe now, but a few more suggestions:
1. Shift the focus to what you have to offer, as opposed to how much you get out of relationships. Yes, you can mention that relationships are fulfilling for you, but just as you would in a cover letter for a job, you want to emphasize your assets and why you'd be a benefit to a prospective partner. Your creativity, spirituality and emotional availability are attractive qualities to many women. some people don;t do this because they fell they are bragging, but there's an art to conveying your attractive qualities that sounds inviting. You need not learn this art from other poly men's profiles. Look around at what other people on OKC write and get a feel for how it's done. There are millions of mediocre profiles on there, so the engaging ones really stand out.
2. You should message me if:
"You are interested to connect with me, not to judge me."
Don't mention judgement because it's defensive and negative, just having it there. Write from the perspective that polyamory is a loving, positive experience and just delete if you get any messages from finger waggers. Your profile is all about giving women a sense of YOU, not just writing factual information, so set the right tone and be proud of your life choices. Also, every other guy (and woman, probably) answers this question as you've done ("if you like what you see, etc. etc. etc.") Consider using this opportunity to stand out, show more personality and say something like "If you're ready for the time of your life" or something that reveals your sense of humor.
